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02-26-2008, 09:51 PM
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This is an essay that I wrote in school for "persuasive writing". If you can please give me some true but still slanted facts on this topic (with an explanation if possible). Also please remember that only five people knew that I was talking about planes (one knew it was about WW2 planes). Remember I wrote for a simple audience.
(gulp) here it is...
Corsair vs. Mustang
The F4U Corsair is a better airplane than the P-51 Mustang. This may seem like an odd topic to choose, but it is important to me. Even though the F4U was better, the Mustang is liked better because of its glamorous role in World War Two. The Corsair had better performance than the P-51. The Corsair had more roles than the Mustang. The Corsair could take off from a carrier, unlike the Mustang. The Mustang had the highly glamorous and romanticized duty of escorting the mighty B-17’s of the 8th Air force over Nazi Germany. It can be compared to the knights of Rohan charging down the hill into battle with the Urik-kai army, rescuing the heroes and saving the day. The Corsair, however, was more suited for the less important role of fighting Imperial Japan in the pacific. That can be compared to walking through a Georgian swamp to find crawdads for supper.
The Corsair had better performance than the Mustang. The Corsair could go 450 miles per hour to the Mustang’s 430. The Corsair could carry 4000 pounds of bombs to 2000. For every Corsair lost in combat, 11 enemy planes were destroyed, for an 11:1 combat ratio. The mustang only had a 6:1 combat ratio.
One of the simplest reasons for the common misconception of the Mustang’s superiority, however, is that, well, the Mustang is prettier.
That is a simple explanation for the superiority of the F4U over the P-51. Even though the mustang was more highly regarded, the corsair performed better, and could do more things.
Thank you for your time.
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02-26-2008, 11:11 PM
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02-26-2008, 11:14 PM
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02-26-2008, 11:17 PM
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thank you very much
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Country:  | The essay is a little choppy, what age group are you writing for? The last sentence of each paregraph should be the topic sentence or a conclusion of that paragraph. Heres how I would reorganize your essay.
intro
-The general perceptions of the 2 planes
- your comparisn of the euro/Jap theatres
-most believe the P51 is better
- this is wrong the F4U is better
2nd paragraph
compare performance of the two planes
F4U -has better performance
-more versatile
- better k/d ratio
3rd paragraph
close with the same paragragh in your first edit
Most of what you wrote is pretty good, just reorganize it abit to make your point stronger.
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02-26-2008, 11:45 PM
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| I wonder what the loss rate for the Corsair would be if it had to fight the far more deadly and dangerous pilots and aircraft of the LW?
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Originally Posted by syscom3  I wonder what the loss rate for the Corsair would be if it had to fight the far more deadly and dangerous pilots and aircfta of the LW? | Always a great question http://www.wwiiaircraftperformance.o...OPERATIONS.pdf
Not claiming this is infallable but it is well researched and the research/findings boundary conditions for conlusions are pretty clear.
At least there is context for ratio's.
Having said this, your points are dead on Syscom. How do you compare when mission, role, threat and application are completely different - and against different equipped adversaries?
I would probably select a Corsair -4 or -5 against the Mustang if the choice was one, and one only against say the 51H if I could only have one fighter for all theatres and missions - but no way was the Corsair a clear 'out perform' versus 51H in all the relevant comparisons... for a similar point in development.. ditto F4U-1 versus P-51B. | |
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Country: | I agree that you hit some of the top points, but your sentence structure is choppy. Seems like they are not complete sentences.
When you say for school, I'm guessing it's for high school? I think you could make it flow a bit better.
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When you say for school, I'm guessing it's for high school? I think you could make it flow a bit better.
| Yes, high school. I had a more complex essay but I simplified it down. Quote: |
what mark did you end up getting magnocain?
| A B- I think...
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