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10-23-2008, 10:24 AM
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| Senior Member  Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: In my Igloo in Canada
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| Song i was writing well apparently i'm pretty good with words and last night I ended up going to a wierd trance wheni wrote this. the Rhyme scheme is pretty basic but the lyrics are pretty solid Gripping your hands tight Tomorrow begins another fight Darkness fills your heart and soul Your mind is lost there’s no control Gaze into your soul with looks of dread And hope to god you wake up dead All is lost pray for salvation To save you from your own damnation Endless rage is your desire So step inside the burning pyre All your hope has gone to silence Enter the world with hells alliance Another time another place Gone insane from your troubled face The end is near so drop to your knees And pray to god to help you please Rage is eternal and so is life To end it all with the blade of a knife Driven to the edge of reason To be the result of god’s own treason Endless rage is your desire So step inside the burning pyre All your hope has gone to silence Enter the world with hells alliance When you break it will be grave Your time is up for we can’t save Say a prayer for your troubled soul For you have paid the ultimate toll
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10-23-2008, 02:40 PM
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| Der Crewchief   Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Ansbach, Germany
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| I take it you are a fan of metal music! Good stuff! I actually like it. I seems like some the stuff I used to write when I was in a Thrash band in High School. I can not wait to get to Alaska so I can form a new band!
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10-30-2008, 08:13 AM
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| Senior Member  Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Melbourne, Victoria
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| Yeah its good, albeit a bit cheesy but then if its for a power metal band it will go very nicely. The verse/stanzas keep the same length which is important however you can mix up with 'hook' words, ie which ones rhyme 1st and 4th or even have them in seperate verses. Ultimately comes down to the music it has to fit around. Keep it up! 
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