Remembering family and Friends - Aircraft of World War II

MP-Willow · 11-19-2004, 03:30 PM

Hello all this is somthing that I was working on for a bit and want to improve. So please read and let me know what you think.

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Remembering!

I have for the past years listened to the stories of WWII and the men and woman who fought and died. But I could never understand them or the emotions that they held. This did change some when at an air show I was looking at a bomber. This was a B-24 Liberator built to help drive back the Nazi's from Europe as my father would say. As I looked up at the artwork and bomb missions, the name Miss. Meghan painted on the side I herd crying. On my left was a Lady dressed in a blue shirt, shorts and a straw hat. A younger woman in jeans and tee shirt escorted her. With tears on her cheeks she just stood and looked up at the bomber. The younger woman held her close both not speaking. An older man stepped slowly over to her. He reached out and put his hand on hers. As the three sets of eyes moved over each other faces moved and more tears fell. This lady had lost a husband in the war. He flew Liberators and never got to see his child grow up. Now his Granddaughter stands looking up at the large engines and tears fall on her face. This now I can start to put emotion and people to the stories of war and hate. The three stand and embrace. The only common tie this large machine of war, the B-24.

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Nonskimmer · 11-19-2004, 03:35 PM

That's pretty touching.

the lancaster kicks ass · 11-19-2004, 03:39 PM

that's amazing

MP-Willow · 11-19-2004, 03:47 PM

thanks all, but what do you think of it? I want to make it better so what can be better? Or if you like it that much do you want it to be longer?

cheddar cheese · 11-19-2004, 05:30 PM

Its very good, but im not of a writer so I dont know how you could make it better.

Nonskimmer · 11-19-2004, 10:06 PM

You're definitley on the right track with this. If anything, maybe you could find a way to make it a bit longer. Just a thought.

GermansRGeniuses · 11-21-2004, 03:03 AM

This is what I fixed...

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Originally Posted by MP-Willow

Remembering!

I have for the past years listened to the stories of WWII and the men and women who fought and died. But I could never understand them or the emotions that they held. This did change some when at an air show I was looking at a bomber, a B-24 Liberator built to help drive back the Nazis from Europe as my father would say. As I looked up at the artwork and bomb missions, the name Miss Meghan painted on the side I heard crying. On my left was a Lady dressed in a blue shirt, shorts, and a straw hat. A younger woman in jeans and t-shirt escorted her. With tears on her cheeks she just stood and looked up at the bomber. The younger woman held her close, neither speaking. An older man stepped slowly over to her. He reached out and put his hand on hers. As the three sets of eyes moved over each other faces moved and more tears fell. This lady had lost a husband in the war who flew Liberators and never got to see his child grow up. Now his granddaughter stands looking up at the large engines and tears fall on her face. Now I can start to put emotion and people into the stories of war and hate. The three stand and embrace. The only common tie this large machine of war, the B-24.

MP-Willow · 11-22-2004, 04:37 PM

GRG, thanks, I wil try to work over this a little more to see what your changes are like.

AS for the question of longer, that can be worked and you might see it in the future. Aviation is somthing I like to write about.

cheddar cheese · 11-22-2004, 05:41 PM

Well you are very good at it

Keep up the good work!

MP-Willow · 11-27-2004, 04:19 PM

Thanks I will be working on this soon.

11-19-2004, 03:30 PM	#1
MP-Willow Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Saco, MAINE!!!! Posts: 894	Remembering family and Friends Hello all this is somthing that I was working on for a bit and want to improve. So please read and let me know what you think. *** Remembering! I have for the past years listened to the stories of WWII and the men and woman who fought and died. But I could never understand them or the emotions that they held. This did change some when at an air show I was looking at a bomber. This was a B-24 Liberator built to help drive back the Nazi's from Europe as my father would say. As I looked up at the artwork and bomb missions, the name Miss. Meghan painted on the side I herd crying. On my left was a Lady dressed in a blue shirt, shorts and a straw hat. A younger woman in jeans and tee shirt escorted her. With tears on her cheeks she just stood and looked up at the bomber. The younger woman held her close both not speaking. An older man stepped slowly over to her. He reached out and put his hand on hers. As the three sets of eyes moved over each other faces moved and more tears fell. This lady had lost a husband in the war. He flew Liberators and never got to see his child grow up. Now his Granddaughter stands looking up at the large engines and tears fall on her face. This now I can start to put emotion and people to the stories of war and hate. The three stand and embrace. The only common tie this large machine of war, the B-24. © Copyright 2004 Willow (UN: mp-willow at Writing.Com). All rights reserved. __________________ Seaplanes Are so nice

11-19-2004, 03:39 PM	#3
the lancaster kicks ass Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2003 Posts: 19,945	that's amazing __________________ "Reminds me of the time I sank the Tirpitz" comments a Spitfire pilot, "One pass of course, old boy."

11-19-2004, 03:47 PM	#4
MP-Willow Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Saco, MAINE!!!! Posts: 894	thanks all, but what do you think of it? I want to make it better so what can be better? Or if you like it that much do you want it to be longer? __________________ Seaplanes Are so nice

11-22-2004, 04:37 PM	#8
MP-Willow Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Saco, MAINE!!!! Posts: 894	GRG, thanks, I wil try to work over this a little more to see what your changes are like. AS for the question of longer, that can be worked and you might see it in the future. Aviation is somthing I like to write about. __________________ Seaplanes Are so nice

11-27-2004, 04:19 PM	#10
MP-Willow Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Saco, MAINE!!!! Posts: 894	Thanks I will be working on this soon. __________________ Seaplanes Are so nice

11-19-2004, 03:35 PM	#2
Nonskimmer Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Halifax, Nova Scotia Posts: 8,871	That's pretty touching.

11-19-2004, 05:30 PM	#5
cheddar cheese Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: WSM, England Posts: 20,387	Its very good, but im not of a writer so I dont know how you could make it better.

11-19-2004, 10:06 PM	#6
Nonskimmer Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Halifax, Nova Scotia Posts: 8,871	You're definitley on the right track with this. If anything, maybe you could find a way to make it a bit longer. Just a thought.

11-22-2004, 05:41 PM	#9
cheddar cheese Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: WSM, England Posts: 20,387	Well you are very good at it Keep up the good work!

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